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    dots Submission Name: ~ Slippery ~dots
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    Author: eminvisible
    Elite Ratio:    3.74 - 14/11/3
    Words: 132
    Class/Type: Poetry/Romance
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       Because life is grand... So, cheers!


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    dots~ Slippery ~dots
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    The heat slipped inside me
    down briskly yet so smooth,
    burst of warmth clouded me,
    infused my flesh in soothe.

    I barely breathe, I barely move,
    licking my lips with Irish-groove.
    This flaming red caresses my mind,
    so daring, so decadent, I find.

    It tosses around, whirling within
    milky whitey shots slamming so slick,
    in the vein of fluids flowing in between
    my thighís sniggering, rocking, all in a flick.

    Closer I moved, I asked for more.
    He gave me a look thatís pleasurable for
    one more round, to fill my six
    He grabbed his filler and poured his mix.

    Flavors exploded on my last,
    burning amber wildly amass.
    Baby, Iím done with toxic blast
    red lips I marked, left on my glass.





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