Damn, I like the imagery. I see a kind of cross between a dog and a sabertooth tiger on the saltflats (forgot where exactly those were...nevada?) and standing over a fresh kill and gazing out over the landscape and seeing the flash of his mate's smile.
I like it. It sounds like there's a lot more story behind it. "stolen glances into a tormented mind" suggests, to me, that the kill I mentioned above wasn't made out of plain hunger or mirth, but out of defence or for the good of the world.
I espically like "Fire red hair grey green eyes blazing" 'cause I've got long 'flaming' red hair and green eyes Although I'm not so sure what that character's all about, I do like "memorys"