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    dots Submission Name: Invisibledots
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    Author: Childe-Wrote
    Elite Ratio:    1.78 - 17/53/44
    Words: 185
    Class/Type: Poetry/Friendship
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    dotsInvisibledots
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    With you gone..
    I feel so lost

    Found myself walking
    Down a forgotten street

    In this denial
    I will not admit

    This world had grown so cold
    And these walls that were down
    Is up once again, fully strong

    This body feels like dying
    This heart feels like stopping

    And I yearn, the days go by
    The same discriminations
    For just five minutes of your time
    I'd love to hear your lovely voice

    You taught me alot
    I have no regrets

    Believe me in this time
    I would have slit my throat

    Watch the sweet blood drip
    You saved this soul from damnation

    And all these precious memories
    Lies and discrimination..

    We've heard them all, been together
    Through the worse, holding strong

    With you back there
    I feel like a ghost

    Name they do not know
    Face they think isn't important

    And with you,
    I feel like I could fly

    Showed off and made a fool
    This child broke free for the last time
    An adult she became, fun faded away




    Submitted on 2007-05-26 20:04:11     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      you showing your inner self. i like in a person. keep it up.
    | Posted on 2008-07-15 00:00:00 | by JoJoCrab | [ Reply to This ]
      because i am going through this too.. but couldnt put it into words!
    | Posted on 2007-05-27 00:00:00 | by Shaza | [ Reply to This ]
      thats heartouching .i like it:) keep it up
    | Posted on 2007-05-27 00:00:00 | by Shaza | [ Reply to This ]
      i feel your pain. i know how you feel walkin along empty roads at nite

    i do it all the time
    | Posted on 2007-05-27 00:00:00 | by Inside Joke | [ Reply to This ]


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