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    dots Submission Name: Cognitive Dissonancedots
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    Author: LucyDiamond
    ASL Info:    17/F/Sky
    Elite Ratio:    3.95 - 365/561/240
    Words: 159
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 140
    Average Vote:    3.0000
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       Half and Half in My Coffee,
    Please.
    No— on Second Thought
    —better make it tea!


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    dotsCognitive Dissonancedots
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    We are the freedoms we invent;
    In isolation, our integrity is intent.
    Why is a smile simply no longer— a smile?
    What did it mean; what should it have meant?

    I am an idea I have set out to be
    And in doing so have formed this ‘me’;
    But in understanding my thoughts, my hearts—
    They seem to stand up tall, and measure equally.

    I don’t think it wise to hurry, I think it best to wait;
    Things either come too early or arrive punctually late
    They are my greatest enemy—
    It is my wild heart and pragmatic head I hate.

    If one day I plainly said to you
    “I love you, dear, do you love me, too?”
    —And you ran away and hid from me—
    I would probably smile and say
    “Well, I never loved you either,
    And I don’t love you today;
    When you ran away from me,
    I looked the other way.”




    Submitted on 2007-05-27 00:18:39     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      *Groan* My heart hurts. I don't know what to say.

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    I think I am in love with you!r work!

    Ouch. It still hurts

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    | Posted on 2007-06-03 00:00:00 | by Suven7 | [ Reply to This ]
      I liked this a lot. The stanza / syllable structure is extremely rough and I do wish it could be cleaned up a little, but the title is quite appropriate for the work. You write a lot like a philosopher to me, constantly asking questions, making plays on words, switching things to make it work for you. This is a general comment to your writing, not specifically this piece, though this is one of the better ones from you I've read. I like the first two lines on the second stanza, that you are a product of your thoughts / ideas.

    Very thoughtful and insightful.
    | Posted on 2007-05-31 00:00:00 | by UnderINK | [ Reply to This ]
      Brilliantly put. You know what I've noticed about your poems recently? They are increasing conversational. When I read the first few lines of this, your most recent work, I was surprised by simply you state things. Though, I must admit, so many of the greatest poets do the same.

    On the obvious level, you speak to the lost naivity of youth, when connotations drag down the innocent ideal. But, I think, this one goes deeper in your own self, and is a bit more personal in nature (if I may be as bold as to suggest such). Oh, what actors we people can be!

    I like your wordplay in the third stanza. "Punctually late"... paradox, but true in action. I particularly enjoy that you've caught one of my personally favored topics: that 'damned practicality' that is both part of sanity and drives one insane. (Or is it merely the conflict between the impractical romantic and practical pragmatic that produces the tension?)

    But, above all, i think the saving grace of this poem was your last stanza. Such honesty! Very commendable. Very true. How easy it is to change masks with convenience. Sad to think that someone would run away from you though... lol. Yet I believe, even if you say you looked away, at least some part of your mind and soul would have followed he who left, with a morsel of regret. Oh, but I am analyzing overmuch. Silly me.

    -Ari


    Here's a nice quote that I like, from a radio play, that i thought just now you would appreciate:

    "Clear vision: That's every great poet's chief gift! The ability to penetrate artifice and mere fashion, conjure up by the miracle of language what IS." -John Gardner, the Temptation Game
    | Posted on 2007-05-27 00:00:00 | by Ari Leukos | [ Reply to This ]
      I really liked this. So simply put and it rings so true... the questions also probe the reader into thinking more about what is being said... But overall, I really liked this one!

    Take care,
    *~ Mist ~*
    | Posted on 2007-05-27 00:00:00 | by PrincessDoom13 | [ Reply to This ]



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