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    dots Submission Name: The New Bad Guydots
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    Author: MornSweetSong
    ASL Info:    21/female/wales
    Elite Ratio:    4.42 - 110/83/46
    Words: 225
    Class/Type: Poetry/
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    dotsThe New Bad Guydots
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    Beaten and broken, I'm crippled by lies.
    It's men that I blame, and men I despise.
    I trusted and believed - in promises made.
    Fucked up but healing the memories won't fade.

    Don't tell me you love me, don't sing my praises.
    You think that I'm stupid - your ignorance amazes.
    Get naked on webcam? Oh perlease don't even try,
    Ten signs you've disrespected - kiss my ass goodbye.

    I lowered my standards and sank to your depth.
    Crawled around in the dirt - no inner strength.
    Writing fucking poetry, because feelings make me sick.
    Smiling, when you cried because I wouldn't suck your ...

    Argh, angsty poetry drives me crazy. A vicious cycle of mine.
    Fixed up, broken down ... they say learning lessons takes time.
    I know I'm on the road to making the same damn mistakes,
    this time round, I can see the vices - from the liars to the fakes.

    I'll smile and giggle and play along with your childlike games.
    It'll all end in YOUR tears ... along with smashed photo frames.
    The tables have turned, now I'm playing the part of Bad Guy.
    I'll walk away stronger, now it's your turn to cry.





    Submitted on 2007-05-27 06:12:10     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Don't sink to their depths! Bad is bad if you're just looking at it like that! No...find a different way to hurting them without hurting yourself. Good poem though, nice imagery, and creating a great great sense of hatred and anger! You make me want to go out and hunt them down with you! Awesome poem!
    Cheerios,
    ~Persephone~
    | Posted on 2007-05-28 00:00:00 | by Persephone | [ Reply to This ]
      Dont let yourself go.
    Be true to who you are. Even if you are broken.
    If it is not in you to be the "bad guy" then dont be it.
    take care of yourself and dont play the circle of abuseive role as the victum either.
    Get out of the circule.
    Notice the tendancey that intrap you over and over again. slowly work yourself away from them.
    I hate to say harden yourself, but sometimes in the moment it is the best way. even in a harden state keep you pluse beating. Let the skin of your heart be healed and pill off the caliss.
    its easer said then done
    i know.
    keep writing.
    snuff
    | Posted on 2007-05-27 00:00:00 | by snufthepunk28 | [ Reply to This ]
      Deep...very deep...You got your point accross that's for sure, I'm at a loss for words...great poem though.
    | Posted on 2007-05-27 00:00:00 | by Realitywarp87 | [ Reply to This ]


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