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    dots Submission Name: when the face appearsdots
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    Author: blackbird
    ASL Info:    31/male/reykjavik iceland
    Elite Ratio:    2.35 - 194/328/300
    Words: 127
    Class/Type: Prose/Misc
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    in any sort of new regal future
    where the mysteries slip to the side
    and new ones form
    like forests on the misty islands
    of our childhood dreamings
    there's always room for change
    when everything is changing

    pride brushed aside
    like the dusty fingers
    of starlit beggars
    busting in front of the shy

    to know you
    has been a darb crushing
    you are the fiery winter
    of the deep summer sweat
    and your breath is freezing

    when i know no other days as these
    and i'm creeping through the hours
    with a snail's gaunt
    i'll still be repeating your name
    in the morning when the face appears
    and the time right before the swallowing sleep
    where even in my dreams
    i can't escape you




    Submitted on 2007-05-27 12:20:24     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I really love this!
    bravo mathew
    | Posted on 2007-05-29 00:00:00 | by Ani | [ Reply to This ]


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