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    dots Submission Name: the slippery cranes of my blooddots
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    Author: blackbird
    ASL Info:    31/male/reykjavik iceland
    Elite Ratio:    2.35 - 194/328/300
    Words: 258
    Class/Type: Prose/Misc
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    dotsthe slippery cranes of my blooddots
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    i rose
    & the flower bejeweled
    with a lions paw
    of wondrous enamour
    slipped from my tongue
    like the resting eagles
    of your swollen eye

    i wonder briefly
    through
    the
    seconds
    & the wasting earth
    i've inhaled along the way
    being known
    & having known
    are never far enough away

    with growing disinterest
    i continue breathing
    & every day
    is a new way to leave behind
    the madness that always grows anew
    & the slippery cranes of my blood
    that move slower with the coming storm

    if i've grieved a lifetime
    it hasn't been my own
    though suffering is relative,
    as am i,
    so too must the positive
    prove what isn't there

    grave a little closer to me
    with your beasts of clean relief
    i wish to see the moon
    in your eyes again
    & walk right on through
    to the inside
    of your impoverished heart
    what i see is what i get
    but only when i'm not looking

    there will come a time
    when the solidity of my certainty
    will catch up with us
    when my lovers lies
    & my very own
    will be something to pass on
    to no one in paticular
    the perfect time to fall apart
    is when everything is breaking

    i'll show you the inside of your own skin
    pulsing in the red wind of my lungs expulsions




    Submitted on 2007-05-27 13:21:34     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      sorry I haven't been commenting or posting..

    The first stanza sounded soo beautiful although I didn't understand what you really meant. reading it was just bomb

    unique.

    excellent excellent
    | Posted on 2007-05-29 00:00:00 | by Ani | [ Reply to This ]


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