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    dots Submission Name: Senses of the Song (Revised)dots
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    Author: Specdro
    ASL Info:    28/Of Course/NY
    Elite Ratio:    2.94 - 21/53/38
    Words: 84
    Class/Type: Poetry/Passion
    Total Views: 1053
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 472



    Description:
       I can not sing, I can not hold a rhythm.
    But I can write poetry about my love and passion.

    -Revision Note-
    After a suggestion on the length of a word I changed it to a better fit.

    "The tune I familiarly know" to "The tune I already know"


    Make the font bigger!! Double Spacing Back to recent posts.

    dotsSenses of the Song (Revised)dots
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    To be deaf would be like death
    Not to hear the music flow.
    To be blind and never find
    The tune I already know.

    To never feel the beat so real
    A life like that would be wrong.
    To never speak more then a squeak
    And never, sing you your song.

    A life with out rhythm I won’t be given
    Because I know I wouldn’t survive
    As I tap my toe, I already know
    I am here and I am alive.




    Submitted on 2007-05-27 16:14:45     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      wow, definitely better!!! really good, i enjoyed reading this a lot
    | Posted on 2007-05-28 00:00:00 | by freeangel | [ Reply to This ]
      i like this as it has such passion, the metre with "familiarly" needs tightening a bit but apart from that i really enjoyed reading it.
    | Posted on 2007-05-27 00:00:00 | by freeangel | [ Reply to This ]


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