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    dots Submission Name: A Love That Never Diesdots

    Author: Realitywarp87
    ASL Info:    25/M/FL
    Elite Ratio:    3.1 - 27/53/63
    Words: 94
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    dotsA Love That Never Diesdots

    A love that never dies
    Is a love few may know
    It's as painful as it comes
    And as tender as it goes
    One love that lasts forever
    As steady as the rain
    Could warm the coldest person
    And break the strongest chains
    It can make you immensly happy
    As much as it tortures your soul
    And when you think too much about it
    It's all that your mind knows
    This love is welded deep
    In my heart it will always be
    And though I will one day pass
    My love will last eternally

    Submitted on 2007-05-27 16:17:52     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Luscious :D
    Absolutely wonderful.
    It flows splendidly, and feels so deep and thoughtful.
    It has a wonderful freelance feel, it sways from the advantages to the disadvantages of love beautifully.

    Well done indeed!

    GBG - Leah
    | Posted on 2007-05-29 00:00:00 | by MornSweetSong | [ Reply to This ]
      its simple. and cool.but i believe you can dig deeper like give more thoght to it.when i read it it didnt make me want to read it again. i dont mean to be rude or disrespectful it was boring in my opinion. i'm just being honest
    | Posted on 2007-05-28 00:00:00 | by vlarrimore | [ Reply to This ]
      Very good flow.
    i believe we are kindred in our thoughts of love.
    we even love the dark beauty of it. Yet, it seems we see its end and wait for it.
    the moment to pass. To awake with such heart ach that we bare in its intance moments. Then it too pass.
    We are free, until the next chaptur and capture of our hearts and fixations of our minds.
    good write
    | Posted on 2007-05-27 00:00:00 | by snufthepunk28 | [ Reply to This ]

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