Writingpoetry

[ Join Free! ]
(No Spam mail)

dotsdots
nav
  • Join Us
  • Writings
  • ES Magazine
  • Shoutbox
  • Community
  • Digg Mashup
  • Mp3 Search
  • Online Education
  • Video Tutorials
  • RolePlay
  • 90% off Amazon
  • Funny Pics
    • nav



    nav
  • Role Play
  • Piano Music
  • Free Videos
  • Web 2.0
    • nav



    << | >>
    poetry


    dots Submission Name: Lay Down Ragesdots
    --------------------------------------------------------





    Author: TheStillSilence
    ASL Info:    18/f/eye of the tornado
    Elite Ratio:    5.57 - 173/86/34
    Words: 73
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
    Total Views: 242
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 556



    Description:
       dont really know what this is..just had to get stuff off my chest...w/e


    Make the font bigger!! Double Spacing Back to recent posts.

    dotsLay Down Ragesdots
    -------------------------------------------


    Raging wars of hatred
    Upon my walls
    Hoping to brake them
    Because they seem false

    Lighting their torches
    With faltered dreams
    With malancholy wishes,
    My semi-silent screams

    Wings cry gently
    And they shed truths
    As walls brake down
    Upon my youth

    Lay down glaciers
    Thats crush me now
    Lay me down
    Upon my bow

    lay down ages
    and maybe dreams
    because walls hold
    what brake the seems





    Submitted on 2007-05-27 22:33:14     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
    Submissions: [ Previous ] [ Next ]

    Rate This Submission

    1: >_<
    2: I dunno...
    3: meh!
    4: Pretty cool
    5: Wow!




    ||| Comments |||
      ... I like it!! So full of the darkness, and pain. This is good. I would suggest typing your poems in microsoft word, then posting them. It would fix the spelling.
    | Posted on 2007-08-23 00:00:00 | by Vampiric Death | [ Reply to This ]


    Think Feedback more than Compliments :: [ Guidelines ]

    1. Be honest.
    2. Try not to give only compliments.
    3. How did it make you feel?
    4. Why did it make you feel that way?
    5. Which parts?
    6. What distracted from the piece?    		7. What was unclear?
    8. What does it remind you of?
    9. How could it be improved?
    10. What would you have done differently?
    11. What was your interpretation of it?
    12. Does it feel original?



    143449



    Full Anime Episodes Streaming Free
    5 million youtube videos all rated over 4.7 stars with 40+ ratings

    [ Copy this | Start New | Full Size ]

    Google
     

    [ Chrispian ] [ Write Forum ]
    [ Friends ] [ SNESroms ] .
    poetry

    dotsLogindots

    User Name:

    Password:

    [ Quick Signup ]
    [ Lost Password ]


    January 10 07
    131,497 Poems
    Posted

    I have 14,000+ Subscribers on Youtube. See my Video Tutorials

    [ Angst Poetry ]
    [ Cutters ]
    [ Famous Poetry ]
    [ Poetry Scams ]



    FontSize:
    [ Smaller ] [ Bigger ]
     Poetry