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    dots Submission Name: Lay Down Ragesdots
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    Author: TheStillSilence
    ASL Info:    20/F/Out in Outer Space
    Elite Ratio:    5.1 - 180/107/54
    Words: 73
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
    Total Views: 899
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    Description:
       dont really know what this is..just had to get stuff off my chest...w/e


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    dotsLay Down Ragesdots
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    Raging wars of hatred
    Upon my walls
    Hoping to brake them
    Because they seem false

    Lighting their torches
    With faltered dreams
    With malancholy wishes,
    My semi-silent screams

    Wings cry gently
    And they shed truths
    As walls brake down
    Upon my youth

    Lay down glaciers
    Thats crush me now
    Lay me down
    Upon my bow

    lay down ages
    and maybe dreams
    because walls hold
    what brake the seems





    Submitted on 2007-05-27 22:33:14     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      ... I like it!! So full of the darkness, and pain. This is good. I would suggest typing your poems in microsoft word, then posting them. It would fix the spelling.
    | Posted on 2007-08-23 00:00:00 | by Vampiric Death | [ Reply to This ]


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