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    dots Submission Name: Triangular Treacherydots
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    Author: Lunablue
    ASL Info:    22/F/LA
    Elite Ratio:    3.37 - 94/70/10
    Words: 78
    Class/Type: Poetry/Passion
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    dotsTriangular Treacherydots
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    I keep finding dried-up, dead flowers stuck to my car


    pasted there from a long drive and the noon sun.


    The rain tore them down from their leafy limbs


    on the trees outside your girlfriend's house


    during a brief downpour yesterday


    while we were holed-up inside


    fucking each other


    in her bed.






    Submitted on 2007-05-27 22:35:25     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Heh, heh! I don't know whether to feel good for you or bad for the girlfriend! This was different, and touches the same nerve that makes us laugh at the comics where someone else is getting clobbered! There is genius at work here, even thought I don't think you intended it!
    | Posted on 2008-07-13 00:00:00 | by Ron Cole | [ Reply to This ]
      wow very nice lunablue... this was a great write and a first for the whole "trianglar" writing style.
    10 out of 10 on creativity. really dig the direct stlye u used.

    "[censored] each other in her bed"

    this line sounds like the narrator hates the girlfriend...
    any way great write

    -sun
    | Posted on 2007-08-23 00:00:00 | by Sun | [ Reply to This ]
      hehe, awesome.

    Sounds... mischevious....
    I love it, and it shall be on my fave's too.

    Your outstanding, you know that?

    I hope you pursue this talent.

    (pursue? sp?)

    necrotic
    | Posted on 2007-06-01 00:00:00 | by necrotic | [ Reply to This ]



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