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    dots Submission Name: Shadows have Shadowsdots

    Author: TheStillSilence
    ASL Info:    20/F/Out in Outer Space
    Elite Ratio:    5.1 - 180/107/54
    Words: 191
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
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    dotsShadows have Shadowsdots

    I give and give with all my heart
    But you take and take.
    I stare behind glasses;
    But they're not there

    I swore I'd never let this happen
    that I'd have the strength
    but history never lets me go

    Claw me and rake my ribs
    Take the razor and slice my wrists
    Brake every bone, thick and thin
    cuz the pain's always worst within

    and whatever i do
    You look the other way
    Like i'm the damn shadow
    upon your grave
    like maybe i'm not human, just a big messed up mistake
    the pain's so bad, it turns to hate

    I hate you, you keep taking parts of me
    turning them into what you truly love to hate
    stepping on every scared part,
    helping turn this pain to hate

    Claw me and rake my ribs
    Take the razor and slice my wrists
    Brake every bone, thick and thin
    cuz the pain's always worst within

    Shadows have shadows that creep inside
    They live on fear and insecirity
    Shadows have shadows with open wounds
    My shadows hide inside of me.

    Submitted on 2007-05-27 22:51:35     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This was very well written the only thing you started out very strong but in the middle it started to get choppy then back on flow other then that this was agreat write and good use of word usage. I really the ending the best. but the one stanza that standed out the most is

    "Claw me and rake my ribs
    Take the razor and slice my wrists
    Brake every bone, thick and thin
    cuz the pain's always worst within"

    Saying you can to any thign to hurt me physically but the hurt inside is so much worst...

    Well hope to hear from you and keep up the good work.

    | Posted on 2007-05-28 00:00:00 | by theman | [ Reply to This ]

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