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    dots Submission Name: Roses Diedots
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    Author: FarFromSanityy
    ASL Info:    15/F/look behind youuu.
    Elite Ratio:    2.8 - 52/76/34
    Words: 193
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Longing
    Total Views: 1123
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1294



    Description:
       This just sorta came to me.
    Nothing lasts forever.


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    dotsRoses Diedots
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    A dozen roses can say "I'm Sorry"
    But they can't clear a guilty conscience
    A written song can say "I love you"
    But love doesn't always last forever
    Just when you thought you had it all
    It all falls apart and you fall with it
    And the world to you just isn't turning
    Anymore...

    When the roses die, and the words fade out
    And you find yourself growing colder by the day
    When the memories hit you like thunder
    You cant help but wonder
    Why did it have to end this way?
    Yeah, nothing lasts forever

    A soft lullaby can say "Sweet dreams"
    But it doesn't mean you'll hold her through the night
    And no matter how beautiful the snow covered hills
    The snow will eventually melt and turn into Spring
    And all you'll have is the memories of a Winter Wonderland...

    When the roses die, and the words fade out
    And you find yourself growing colder by the day
    When the memories hit you like thunder
    You cant help but wonder
    Why did it have to end this way?
    Yeah, nothing lasts forever

    Nothing...nothing...no...
    Nothing lasts forever...




    Submitted on 2007-05-28 16:55:38     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      woah. i haven't even gotten past the first stanza and i already adoreeee this song. wait now, i have to finish the rest.
    ..
    okay, my favorite part was definitely "It all falls apart and you fall with it". I've never thought of that kind of wording before, and i thought it was wonderfuuuul. the first stanza captures so much..you have such a way with words, dear. and the chorus was very well done. you are such a great writer :]
    | Posted on 2007-07-21 00:00:00 | by DontxSurrender | [ Reply to This ]
      That was amazing! Such feeling and emotion behind it. Really well worded.
    | Posted on 2007-05-29 00:00:00 | by BigDreams | [ Reply to This ]
      It's really good. I loved the imagery and you kept an overall theme without repeating the exact same example. Great write.
    | Posted on 2007-05-28 00:00:00 | by Vile Deception | [ Reply to This ]
      you have such an amazing way with words.!
    | Posted on 2007-05-28 00:00:00 | by black rose13 | [ Reply to This ]
      This was really beautiful, Raven! Nothing last forever, but the memory of nothing ......lasts!!!

    You have a developing talent that is marvelous!
    | Posted on 2007-05-28 00:00:00 | by Ron Cole | [ Reply to This ]


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