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    dots Submission Name: Why You Shouldn't Drink Coffee Late at Nightdots
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    Author: Persephone
    ASL Info:    19/f/ US
    Elite Ratio:    3.53 - 328/352/136
    Words: 89
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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       So, this is some random thought that I had early this morning after drinking probably way to much coffee last night.


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    dotsWhy You Shouldn't Drink Coffee Late at Nightdots
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    I'm afraid of sports cars,
    but I drive way past the limit in an SUV.
    I hate being alone,
    but people annoy the crap out of me.

    I get frustrated over my inabilities,
    but I tell others no matter what, they're good enough.
    I hate drama queens,
    but I can't stand that I'm this tough.

    I'm a thousand contradictions,
    but somehow I always pull through,
    I'm just the reasons
    without the facts.

    I'm nothing in my mind,
    but I'm everything in my heart.




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      Story of my life.
    | Posted on 2007-08-18 00:00:00 | by jennah | [ Reply to This ]
      i say hooray coffee! always produces something fun. i like this piece..riddled with honesty...almost like your sitting in a support group circle and its your turn to stand up and tell about yourself. not a bad thing. good thing, def. woooo.
    | Posted on 2007-05-30 00:00:00 | by lark | [ Reply to This ]
      The last 2 lines are excellent.
    I think of myself/ my life as a bunch of contradictions also. That's probable why I can hardly make up my mind, and get anything accomplished. I wrote something a little similar to this. Thanks for sharing this.

    Nicely
    | Posted on 2007-05-29 00:00:00 | by nicelyJ | [ Reply to This ]
      I drink way too much coffee at night also.
    Nice thoughts. the mind does float when you drink way to much. I think actually...the next day...if you stay up till dawn. The morning will be beautiful. Caffiene thoughts are rather abstract...but it feels good.
    so I understand about the crazy thoughts you talk about.
    | Posted on 2007-05-28 00:00:00 | by rAbit | [ Reply to This ]
      hmm some really cool thoughts here. ... maybe i've had too much coffee as well. i really do hate being alone, but i cant stand people. and that line really captured my interest. i think this could be more than just thoughts though, if you want to make it into something. right now its just coming right out and saying here this is what i am. which can be good. i think this is really neat as is, but if you took this idea, some imagery, maybe a story of some kind, you could really make this something. huh just me thinking though. great thoughts though.

    -steph
    | Posted on 2007-05-28 00:00:00 | by playcrackthesky | [ Reply to This ]
      The best part of this piece is that it's so easy to relate to. For me, it is. Especially lines 2 and 3. Those last 2 stanzas are great.


    Keep Writing,
    Elle
    | Posted on 2007-05-28 00:00:00 | by GetFighted | [ Reply to This ]


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