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    dots Submission Name: Walking Skipping Running thrudots

    Author: lolavie
    ASL Info:    23/female/Michigan
    Elite Ratio:    3.26 - 70/175/103
    Words: 48
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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       The 3 ways to look at things..read more than once if ya have to,...i can write some confusding stuff..get out of it what u must...heres something..why dont u tell em what u think its about hmm? Ciao!

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    dotsWalking Skipping Running thrudots

    Three signs at intersection
    Rock the boat
    Let it sink
    Go overboard

    Laughing constantly
    Its hilarious
    Its a scary kind of funny
    Its so funny its corny

    Let go of my leg

    Life a puzzle
    Look at it
    Piece together
    Solve it

    Submitted on 2004-06-15 07:11:36     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I couldn't comment on this one because we were both at that intersection and trying to figure out what way to go.

    I won't dare to try and figure out this poem for you. It was so hard for me, because I was choosing to let you go, despite everything in my heart wanting me to stay. I only wish I had met you when I was more normal, used to people enough so that I wouldn't always hesitate. And knowing that was my weakness I did my best to make it so you could not hesitate, that once I was gone you would never think of me in that way again.

    The only problem was I did it so strongly that I lost you as a friend as well, which was never my intention though I feared it would happen ever since that messed up shopping expedition.

    So yes, we all suffer from anxiety, and we all make decisions, some good, some less so. I just know I'll be back to skipping along like a merry fool myself, and hope the same for you.
    | Posted on 2004-06-27 00:00:00 | by DocJonathan | [ Reply to This ]
      I'll reserve the ability to comment later, for time right now presses, but you are right. You need to read this at least three times, and each one different, in pace if nothing else (how ones reads with a walking, skipping, and running pace I'll leave to everyone else to think about for a moment).

    This of course means it has to be reviewed and critiqued three different ways to do a full job, and furthermore at least one of them 'running' I can't handle at the moment for personal reasons. But I'll get back to this later tonight when I'm done with the day and take care of the other two.

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    | Posted on 2004-06-15 00:00:00 | by DocJonathan | [ Reply to This ]
      the bumby flow helps to show the anxiety, makes it visible. you have to read it a few times to get it but it's good. I enjoyed it. well done.
    | Posted on 2004-06-15 00:00:00 | by eve1684 | [ Reply to This ]
      Okay, This makes total sense. You sound nervous, Very uneasy and anxious about making the right decision. Oh yeah, I like this, It really makes you think. Hope to see more.

    | Posted on 2004-06-15 00:00:00 | by DyingtoLive | [ Reply to This ]
      i like it I like how the flow is kinda jumopy like your nervous at what is going to happen next the second stanza with the its seems kind of out of place because the rest of them are very direct and descriptive
    | Posted on 2004-06-15 00:00:00 | by casey | [ Reply to This ]
      heres a hint; Anxiety! sorry..had to give ya that one!

    read the poem with 'anxiety' in mind..it may make more sense to ya
    | Posted on 2004-06-15 00:00:00 | by lolavie | [ Reply to This ]

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