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    dots Submission Name: By The Hand...dots
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    Author: spacedoutboy
    ASL Info:    22/M/Il
    Elite Ratio:    3.09 - 32/48/23
    Words: 193
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
    Total Views: 780
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    dotsBy The Hand...dots
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    You knew us better than we could ever know
    A destiny before the existence
    Dead already but we never saw it comin'

    And before I could...
    I would...

    Diving into spite
    The hatfully driven spear just drove you mad
    Waves of justice bring you delight
    Destoying what we had...

    Waiting for the ascention...
    Waiting for the rise and fall off...
    Condescend to eternal slumber
    And into the nothing that makes up our fears

    Dont shout a war cry...
    Dont speak a whisper...
    "Dont let me hear a shout until the day I say shout, then shout."

    They marched around the walls
    Silent as you wished
    The calm before the fall
    The gently handed fist

    Kneel unto the lamb
    Beg for your amnesties
    His words are like a dance
    Barreling in your head
    As he fills your cup full of shit

    Now we've come back around
    Completed the full circle
    Our perils will unfold
    Before our very eyes




    Submitted on 2007-05-28 23:00:41     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      WOW!!!
    It was kind of long and on-going but other compared to the title, but i loved it!!!
    Very war like... just like life.

    Peace;

    Check some of my writes out!

    1 U should really read is "swirling, spinning to count the moments of pain."

    ~MaGgIe
    | Posted on 2007-06-30 00:00:00 | by Magger32 | [ Reply to This ]


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