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    dots Submission Name: you losedots
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    Author: ladiesplanet1
    ASL Info:    23.cali baby
    Elite Ratio:    3.58 - 720/463/165
    Words: 149
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Venting
    Total Views: 482
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 851



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       for all the people who think they are better than me... you're not. and if you think you're gonna be the one who wins guess again because i already won.


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    dotsyou losedots
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    you think you're clever
    but you take drastic measures
    you turn to pleasure
    you want the treasure
    but i took it
    and booked it
    and i came back the next day
    to rub it in your face
    so how does that taste
    in your mouth
    does it make you want to spit it out
    and shout
    all about
    me and my fame
    cuz this is just a game
    and you lost and its your shame
    i guess i am the one to blame
    for your loss
    cuz i won and i guess thats the cost
    but i wouldn't know cuz im not a loser
    i'm a choose-r
    and i chose to win
    and i did
    even though you tried so hard
    and you got so far
    but i got farther than you
    so what are you gonna do
    except accept the fact that you lose




    Submitted on 2007-05-29 14:01:57     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Nice! Be better if you use caps for the "I"s though.
    | Posted on 2007-06-05 00:00:00 | by Ur.Poems.Suck | [ Reply to This ]


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