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    dots Submission Name: Blank Screendots
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    Author: ImperfectGirl1
    ASL Info:    18 f USA
    Elite Ratio:    2.52 - 21/37/26
    Words: 104
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 104
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 698



    Description:
       This was written as I was suppose to be writing my Spanish paper. As I was looking at the blank, white screen, I started the poem. Please tell me what you think and if it is any good.


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    dotsBlank Screendots
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    Everyone starts with it,
    It is untouched,
    Unwritten upon.

    It has yet to be tainted
    By all the aspects of the world
    And by the lives of others.

    It is so clean
    Because people don’t know
    How to start the story.

    Over the years, the blank screen
    Starts to have typed words
    Magically appear.

    The words evolve
    As the story grows
    And the life changes.

    The blank screen is no longer blank.
    It’s filled with an endless
    Amount of ever-changing words.

    The blank screen
    Is now full of
    A life, wisdom, and story.




    Submitted on 2007-05-29 15:42:57     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I smiled with this piece and "IT" reminds me of the honest and joyous inner being of child. What is blank? This imperfect girl sees worlds unfold while others just stare.

    Bravo and thanks for sharing!

    love,peace,joy&smiles to share

    tif
    | Posted on 2007-05-30 00:00:00 | by Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]


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