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    dots Submission Name: FIRST SMILEdots
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    Author: sbridges
    ASL Info:    33/F/Los Angeles
    Elite Ratio:    2.94 - 119/119/63
    Words: 122
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsFIRST SMILEdots
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    upon awakening to light
    the disguised sun
    in that robotic hospital room
    someone held him up
    exhibiting him to the flash
    of my husbandís hold on the camera
    eye-browless, the puffiness around his eyes
    swollen with sight
    and marked with the residue of his placenta,
    a souvenir on film,
    of his turbulent prenatal matrix
    that worries me
    but makes me feel
    as grand as the world
    that revolves around this awesome baby
    what am I supposed to be?
    I must pray for myself too..
    Hail Mary, Hail Mary, Hail Mary!
    His voice speaks to me
    emerging from a great big smile
    on this pale infantís bright-colored
    wide-open lips
    toungue loose and peeking thru
    His first smile,
    or is it a grin?




    Submitted on 2007-05-29 16:16:19     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Isn't life wonderful! This really captures a special moment and the momentary confusion sometimes felt before and at the moment but when you look into the eyes and feel the smile (not gas!) of the life from you - WOW!
    Thanks for sharing!
    love,peace,joy&smiles to share
    tif
    | Posted on 2007-05-30 00:00:00 | by Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]
      How cute! you brought your baby to life in this poem. I thought it was too descriptive at the start, I didn't get the emotions of the poem, yet after the first few lines I saw the excitement, the love and the amazement of the moment.
    Cya later,
    Steff
    | Posted on 2007-05-30 00:00:00 | by steffunni | [ Reply to This ]


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