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Love Takes Flight


Author: LadyMustang
ASL Info:    42, female, West Virginia
Elite Ratio:    4.19 - 222 /171 /71
Words: 120
Class/Type: Poetry /Love
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It's beautiful when loves is fresh and new


Love Takes Flight



Love Takes Flight

Come,My love
Fly with my spirit upon wings of night,
As our soul catches the glimmering
stars when our love takes flight.

Come run with me
Let's stroll along the edges of passion's
fire, From dusk til dawn as we intertwine
in the ecstasy of desire.

Come lay with me
My love as our bodies never tire, As
the juices of our love flow we become
one glowing in the flmes of love's
eternal fire.

Come kiss me
My love let me taste your lips so sweet,
As we come face to face with a kiss this
love makes us so complete.

Written By: Ladymustang
copyright@ 2007




Submitted on 2007-05-29 19:20:46     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  i liked it all, the only thing i didn't find interesting was that all the vocabulary and wording is the same as the one about the roses.
the idea of this poem was good and something easy to work with, but it's just another copy of the other one with a different title.
it could be better.
Peace<3

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| Posted on 2007-06-01 00:00:00 | by BleedingTears | [ Reply to This ]
  I really enjoyed it. It reminds me of a new relationship, or the high your on a few months after marriage.
Well written, good job.
| Posted on 2007-05-30 00:00:00 | by Broken Halo | [ Reply to This ]


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