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    dots Submission Name: Whisper Shadowsdots
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    Author: Zara
    ASL Info:    16,Female, U.S.
    Elite Ratio:    5.64 - 13/16/10
    Words: 21
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 898
    Average Vote:    4.0000
    Bytes: 195



    Description:
       This is just a short poem that has yet to be perfected. It is based off of a feeling that I had and I posted on an old forum known as Shadows and Whispers.


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    dotsWhisper Shadowsdots
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    Wings whisper,
    Making shadows crawl,
    Black night,
    Lovely kiss,
    Here tonight,
    Black abyss,
    Shadows and Whispers abound,
    Shaking all around.




    Submitted on 2007-05-29 23:53:45     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Great poetry. Short but meaningful. The image you use here is fit the meaning bgehind this poetry. The last part is the best part.

    Shadows and Whispers abound,
    Shaking all around.

    This one is worth reading. Keep it up.

    -David-
    | Posted on 2007-07-19 00:00:00 | by garnet4david | [ Reply to This ]
      lovley and intigueing. greta images pop up and the emotion that seems to flow from the way the words are used together. a very excellent piece like the other two said, truely worth the read. once again great job.
    | Posted on 2007-06-04 00:00:00 | by BarleyBreathing | [ Reply to This ]
      Lovely, short but sweet. Wings whisper sounds as if even the simple sounds that come at night have significance, like Ron said, it almost seems as if you are describing two people who find refuge in the night to be together. Like I said short but very intreaging.
    | Posted on 2007-06-01 00:00:00 | by DiamondTears | [ Reply to This ]
      Makes me think of moods so quiet and nights so black that even whispers have an echo! This is a stunning piece! It is short, but it is enchanting and intrigueing; it inspires vivid mind views!
    | Posted on 2007-05-30 00:00:00 | by Ron Cole | [ Reply to This ]


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