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    dots Submission Name: Remembering...dots
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    Author: jackz
    ASL Info:    24/F/OH
    Elite Ratio:    3.76 - 591/622/380
    Words: 272
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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       mmm.. just a lot going threw my head!


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    dotsRemembering...dots
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    Looking back...

    Remembering those days
    I stared out of a black pick-up truck window..

    Remembering those nights
    I cried myself to sleep…

    Remembering those words…
    Spoken so ... nonchalently… "You're never seeing him again"

    Looking back I remember
    Pain
    As I re-live it this very moment
    And ohh... It feels so real…
    As the tears stream down these cheeks of mine...
    Just as they did back then

    Remembering...
    Those secret phone calls I made to you

    Or how…

    I write you letters with NO return address…
    Afraid the post office would mess up and send it back…

    I remember how I thought I could never loose you
    Because you were the only one who actually seem to care
    But I see now...
    That you only cared because I was an object to you and nothing more!

    You know all I wanted then…

    And still now to a degree... a very small

    degree...


    Were a father and I being so young and naive...
    I thought you could be him

    UHH

    Just how ignorant can person be right?
    If my own biological father doesn’t want me why would you...
    Why..
    How..
    Could I actully get the idea that you'd want me?
    You actually wanting me for me, and not for any other reason?

    Why would I actually give my mom the satisfaction of thinking she did some good? =l




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      I actually do this a lot =p I have to because my secret person is older than me =o So if my parents find I'm knackered in a way. Good write, hope to hear more. Shadow
    | Posted on 2007-06-04 00:00:00 | by Shadow24968 | [ Reply to This ]
      Writes like these are very cleansing and like a journal entry they are also very therapeutic.

    I've been working "The Artist's Way" and part of that process is morning pages and many days they are just as this and I can say, in my experience, getting these feellings out, confronting and embracing these cyclical feelings - really understanding and turning those experiences to manifestations of what our soul really is.

    great job!

    love,peace,joy&smiles to share

    tif
    | Posted on 2007-05-30 00:00:00 | by Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]


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