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    dots Submission Name: Remembering...dots

    Author: jackz
    ASL Info:    24/F/OH
    Elite Ratio:    3.76 - 591/622/380
    Words: 272
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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       mmm.. just a lot going threw my head!

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    Looking back...

    Remembering those days
    I stared out of a black pick-up truck window..

    Remembering those nights
    I cried myself to sleep…

    Remembering those words…
    Spoken so ... nonchalently… "You're never seeing him again"

    Looking back I remember
    As I re-live it this very moment
    And ohh... It feels so real…
    As the tears stream down these cheeks of mine...
    Just as they did back then

    Those secret phone calls I made to you

    Or how…

    I write you letters with NO return address…
    Afraid the post office would mess up and send it back…

    I remember how I thought I could never loose you
    Because you were the only one who actually seem to care
    But I see now...
    That you only cared because I was an object to you and nothing more!

    You know all I wanted then…

    And still now to a degree... a very small


    Were a father and I being so young and naive...
    I thought you could be him


    Just how ignorant can person be right?
    If my own biological father doesn’t want me why would you...
    Could I actully get the idea that you'd want me?
    You actually wanting me for me, and not for any other reason?

    Why would I actually give my mom the satisfaction of thinking she did some good? =l

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      I actually do this a lot =p I have to because my secret person is older than me =o So if my parents find I'm knackered in a way. Good write, hope to hear more. Shadow
    | Posted on 2007-06-04 00:00:00 | by Shadow24968 | [ Reply to This ]
      Writes like these are very cleansing and like a journal entry they are also very therapeutic.

    I've been working "The Artist's Way" and part of that process is morning pages and many days they are just as this and I can say, in my experience, getting these feellings out, confronting and embracing these cyclical feelings - really understanding and turning those experiences to manifestations of what our soul really is.

    great job!

    love,peace,joy&smiles to share

    | Posted on 2007-05-30 00:00:00 | by Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]

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