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    dots Submission Name: a mother, a promise, a momentdots

    Author: flyfire
    ASL Info:    17, Female, Australia
    Elite Ratio:    2.25 - 33/19/14
    Words: 81
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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       Rabia is a poet and she lived around 1500 years ago. "All of what I would want my child to know..." is her poetry.

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    dotsa mother, a promise, a momentdots

    seeking sanctuary; reading, music perched on ears, oblivious to the pulse of the world.
    she leant over me (softly, slowly) and i looked up only after her tears burst on Rabia
    of what
    I would want my child to know...].
    her lips formed the word beyond the throbbing wall of my headphones.
    i hooked her pinkie with mine silently and she smiled
    a wavering anxious-eyed smile as
    the beautiful wrist red smarted
    beneath my jumper.

    Submitted on 2007-05-30 02:25:01     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      i liked this a lot better than your other stuff because it gave me an image to go with and i felt that there was something there. interpretation is fine, its great inmmany cases but sometimes its overrated because it keeps a poet from saying something real for fear of saying something unrelatable.
    | Posted on 2007-05-30 00:00:00 | by EEKS | [ Reply to This ]

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