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    dots Submission Name: A love like thisdots
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    Author: EmeRalDEyeZ5491
    ASL Info:    16.female.Ohio
    Elite Ratio:    2.1 - 130/137/105
    Words: 118
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
    Total Views: 803
    Average Vote:    4.0000
    Bytes: 795



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    dotsA love like thisdots
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    I can't believe
    this is happening to me
    said it wouldnt
    oh how it shouldnt

    the pain I feel
    is unbearable
    the horror sustained
    is killing me

    this shouldnt be happening
    take a turn the other way
    open each door, look on the floor
    for any escape at all

    oh how the human heart can be so cruel
    watching me stumble and fall through
    betryaing me beyond belief for
    letting me love like this, letting me fall like this

    a love like this,
    so pure and innocent
    yet so strong and fiery
    shant be put out so fast

    cruel outside forces
    blew out the flame
    before it even reached its
    highest intensity




    Submitted on 2007-05-30 17:35:32     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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