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    dots Submission Name: Imaginary Lifedots
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    Author: necrotic
    ASL Info:    18/f/New York City, Baby!
    Elite Ratio:    8 - 198/94/33
    Words: 191
    Class/Type: Poetry/Trapped
    Total Views: 184
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1293



    Description:
       Another one I found in the book, liked the idea a lot, but it ended after two sentences, so I kept those and added to it last night, and thought I would share it with you all today, because I like it a lot.


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    dotsImaginary Lifedots
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    Where clouds can go unspoken.
    Where raindrops fall with a sudden sound of screaming.
    Where only sunshine blocks the view of flowers,
    and you find me there waiting.
    To hold you upon stars thinking,
    what do dreams hold inside their own heads?
    The invisible nightscape blanketing itself upon us.
    To whisper lullabies in our ears,
    as blackness paints a picture on our blue eyes.
    Forever we hold each other tight,
    forgiving sins casted upon shadowns of our past.
    Opening windows to a metal door locked away from insanity.
    The blue moons from years ago trap themselves inside us.
    To hold the star amungst an audience on trial for disappearing that day.
    The rain falls like acid,
    Screaming something imaginary-
    unfamiliar-
    Locking us away in a grey room,
    where we scratch the walls with claws like raving monsters.
    Only reveal a purple glass staring into our hopes.
    To shatter the glass, you shatter the dreams.
    And the world could come crashing before our white eyes, dancing with a hint of black.
    Immortality-
    Such Hell in my eyes,
    We'd rather sink to disappearing skies.
    Holding life with our dusty fingers.




    Submitted on 2007-05-31 10:29:45     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      shadowns

    I think this should be shadows.

    Opening windows to a metal door locked away from insanity.
    The blue moons from years ago trap themselves inside us.


    oh boy. this sounds like something I'd scribble down on a bad day. The first two sentences were written first, if I'm not wrong, it flows quite easily for a let's-finish-this-another-day poem. Heh.

    One thing I have to inquire though, the second use of rain... If it screams already why is it acidic..?

    Immortality-

    NICE!

    Cheers
    Azuire
    | Posted on 2007-07-30 00:00:00 | by Azuire | [ Reply to This ]



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