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    dots Submission Name: Shatter my innocencedots
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    Author: gothicgirl
    ASL Info:    23/f/recreant world
    Elite Ratio:    3.49 - 127/111/48
    Words: 93
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
    Total Views: 944
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    Description:
       i wrote this awhile back, and just now found it anyway yeah...


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    dotsShatter my innocencedots
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    Shatter my innocence, corrupting my modest mind
    don't hesitate, tell me what your trying to find.
    Embrace my vivid imagination
    with your own obscene fabrication
    distorting my perception of a rational impulse
    to conceal what is truly false.
    Let me decay in my cursed existence
    while Iím being drained of all resistance.
    Your perversion will not satisfy or stimulate,
    but it will destroy and annihilate.
    Your already ill fated and intoxicated.
    So tell me what is realistic to you my friend
    or are you misleading me to the very end?




    Submitted on 2007-05-31 14:32:52     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      too me, this is very cunning -- not in a,
    i-have-fooled-you way . more like, you have
    abandoned me & Left me in this drowning-pool.
    justz too cut me down. [maybie i'm wrong]

    but in any case, i thought the poem was very intense. head-strong, not going to forfeit.
    i did like it (a lot) it made me feel - as if, even in darkness will still have power.
    good write .....

    ~bloodstone

    fav line: To conceal what is truly false
    ...now that is fucking power !
    | Posted on 2011-07-30 00:00:00 | by Bloodstone | [ Reply to This ]
      i liked this one too, innocence is something that isn't valued much anymore, glad you wrote about it!! have a good day and i'll read more...
    | Posted on 2008-01-08 00:00:00 | by scissorhands | [ Reply to This ]
      god i love this one! you have read it to me...but i liked reading it too!
    | Posted on 2007-06-13 00:00:00 | by Frivilous _ | [ Reply to This ]


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