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    dots Submission Name: "A Stranger In Paradise"dots
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    Author: Ron Cole
    Elite Ratio:    3.78 - 1667/1121/181
    Words: 182
    Class/Type: Prose/Misc
    Total Views: 191
    Average Vote:    5.0000
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    It was her favorite place by the Sea,
    where the waves crashed against the outer Shoals,
    and rose high, hissing and roaring as they tumbled to shore.

    The Sea Wind freshened her face, and pressed her skirt against her dainty, shapely figure. It lifted her hair, giving her an exotic, Siren form, exactly as if she belonged in these surroundings.

    She could smell the sweat of Sailors, the
    perfume of the Islands, and the lore
    and majesty of the Sea in the Sea Breezes.

    A Gull cried raucously overhead, and
    she could hear the Siren's Call, beconing her
    beyond the Shore, beyond the Waves.
    But she was a Siren, and knew not to answer the call,
    only enjoy the enchanting harmony and sweetness
    of its' exotic melody.

    She was alone, and all of Nature seemed
    to take notice of her beauty, and of the fact
    that she was among them, there along the shore.

    She walked alone
    enchanted, and enchanting,
    A Stranger In Paradise!!

    Ron Cole
    March 2007




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      Oh, i see now it says prose, tee hee. I was just confused, nvm. I adore it! haha, my bad!

    Blessed Be and Peace Out
    | Posted on 2007-09-05 00:00:00 | by Hungarian Girl | [ Reply to This ]
      It didnt seem like much of a poem, more like prose, but it was still wonderful! It made me wish I was at the sea again. This made me physically smile, so kudos! I loved it, and it was so sweet!

    Blessed Be and Peace Out
    | Posted on 2007-09-05 00:00:00 | by Hungarian Girl | [ Reply to This ]
      What a lovely description!... I think paradise itself would be quite incomplete without this stranger...Enjoyed it a lot...I am beginning to adore your poetry that is:

    "enchanted, and enchanting"

    Wonderful work, amazing creativity...

    Have a great day,
    Parul.
    | Posted on 2007-06-23 00:00:00 | by Parul garg | [ Reply to This ]
      There's a mysterious quality about this siren that pulls the reader into the story. How lonely she must be! A most enjoyable read for anyone who loves the sea---and that certainly includes me! :-) Sharon
    | Posted on 2007-06-14 00:00:00 | by Peggy Paris | [ Reply to This ]
      Ah, much more like a prose poem than an actually poem, but you have set the table and cast a most marvelous spell with this piece! excellent! excellent! I loved it! ... bravo ... bravo ...
    | Posted on 2007-06-04 00:00:00 | by Algol46 | [ Reply to This ]
      there is a place in Saltcoats, Scotland, where my grandfather used to stroll. its right across the shore front. on a clear day, you can see across to the islands...its a breathtaking sight. i walk there when i visit, and the way you describe the sea and smells is exactly what i experience there. i feel i belong there....its like home in my heart. this is a fav for personal reasons...you are amazing Ron.

    'It was her favorite place by the Sea,
    where the waves crashed against the outer Shoals,
    and rose high, hissing and roaring as they tumbled to shore.'

    that is wonderful...i can almost feel the breeze...heaven!!
    michelle xx

    | Posted on 2007-05-31 00:00:00 | by whirl | [ Reply to This ]


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