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    dots Submission Name: I miss youdots
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    Author: Specdro
    ASL Info:    28/Of Course/NY
    Elite Ratio:    2.94 - 21/53/38
    Words: 135
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Love
    Total Views: 953
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 729



    Description:
       I wrote this song for my wife years ago and she likes me to sing it to her so I will never forget it. I am not very talented musicaly but it goes to the tune of "Follow Me" by Uncle Cracker.


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    dotsI miss youdots
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    I miss you
    When Iím not around
    I would die to kiss you
    When our love isnít found
    I work all day and I am never alone
    In my heart you stay
    Until I come home

    And I will hold you
    And I will kiss you
    And I will tell you
    How much I missed you
    How much I missed you

    I couldnít go on, day to day
    If I didnít know you were in my life to stay
    Youíre my life line in this war of life
    I put a ring on your finger just to call you my wife

    And I will hold you
    And I will kiss you
    And I will tell you
    How much I missed you
    How much I missed you
    How much I miss you




    Submitted on 2007-05-31 18:42:29     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      These lyrics were pretty awesome. . . . . . . . . . . . . .. . . . . . . . .I love the last stanza . . . . . . . .

    And I will hold you
    And I will kiss you
    And I will tell you
    How much I missed you
    How much I missed you
    How much I miss you

    It went from past to present so quickly. This whole piece can relate to so many people, and I think that's great. Usually when people rhyme they worry too much about that, and they forget about the deeper meaning. . . . . . . but this isn't like that at all. It was as if it was effortless. Nice job.

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    | Posted on 2007-06-02 00:00:00 | by SilentDreams42 | [ Reply to This ]


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