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    dots Submission Name: Whendots
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    Author: Rainin_Raspbery
    ASL Info:    18/F/Edmonton,AB, Canada
    Elite Ratio:    3.73 - 140/111/74
    Words: 285
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
    Total Views: 91
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1920



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    dotsWhendots
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    Held Hostage By My Own Insecurity
    Unsure Of What To Do
    Someday This Vice Grips Going To Blow
    Should I Plan An Escape Route,
    Will I Ever Be Able To Let Go,
    Come on Though How Can I,
    Cant You Tell,
    It's Not As Simple As It May Seem,
    Takes Time To Put The Broken Pieces,
    Back Together So They Work In Conjunction,
    Honestly It Could Take Ages,
    Are You Willing To Wait That Long,
    Could Take As Long As The China Gate.


    Aching Are My Insides,
    Consistantly Infused With Pain,
    Never Gaining Anything,
    Only Engraving More Shame,
    Never Moving Forward,
    Only Becoming Barried,
    Im Loosing Light,
    There's Barley Any Sight Of Hope,
    The Hole's Beyond Deep,
    I'm Already Crippling,
    Still Dewelling On What Should Be Tamed,
    Caged Are My Fears,
    Roaring Like Wild Tigers,
    Scared To Speak There Mind,
    Still There Screaming I Surrender,
    No Clue How To Deal With This Broken Fender,
    I've Been Held Capitive For So Long,
    How Can I,
    How Do I,
    Just Say Its Ok,
    When It's Been Eating Me For So Long,
    Saying Ok Would Be Like,
    Seeking The Impossible,
    Where Would I Go,
    Where To Turn,
    Who's Carry Me When I Fall?


    Afraid to stop being the ox,
    And thinking so slowly,
    Making a move once a year,
    will my insides unravle,
    Right now there scrambling,
    There aching for life,
    there searching for air,
    should i let them breathe,
    or soak them in some more alcohol,
    When should i admit,
    Ive got a problem with Coping,
    Who will get it,
    They just think its a pety line,
    When I can be Let Go,
    When Will i Be Free to Let Me Be.




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      I thought that the first and last stanza were really quite good, either could stand alone, or be one poem...the second stanza, in my humble opinion was not as quite as good the other two...still a fine poem ... bravo ... bravo ... bravo ... michael
    | Posted on 2007-06-08 00:00:00 | by Algol46 | [ Reply to This ]
      This is very lyrical and an angst-ridden tale of "When" most artists and creative sorts go through.

    I'm 37 in the world's years but young at heart and I can tell you, from similar experience, "IT" does get better and have faith in yourself and free yourself and whatever situation arises you will always just rock on - Truly BeIng is a wonderful and ongoing discovery!

    Great job and enjoy!

    love,peace,joy&smiles to share

    tif
    | Posted on 2007-06-01 00:00:00 | by Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]



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