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    dots Submission Name: The principle of Perfection: Sonnet to my beloveddots
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    Author: Nearby Thoughts
    ASL Info:    18; Female; Valhalla
    Elite Ratio:    3.3 - 11/5/23
    Words: 119
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 774
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    Description:
       it was homework! the only reason I would ever attempt to write something and call it poetry. check the iambic pentameter, it works.
    I was inspired by Rowan (the star of Bestial Lust) because, if she was real, I would be very in love with her.


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    dotsThe principle of Perfection: Sonnet to my beloveddots
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    Who is this woman so mesmerizing,
    whose beauty is beyond compare?
    I feel the desire within me rising
    Oh! what flaming locks of auburn hair!

    I'm held captive by her eyes, rich pools of jade
    How I crave those obscene and fleshy lips of vibrant vermillion
    Heeavens bless the skilled hand by whom she was made
    Every passing moment without her drives me closer to the abyss of oblivion.

    A faint luminosity wrapped around her like a mist
    Velvet smooth is her porcelain skin
    I can't sleep at night, haunted by the memory of the first time we kissed
    Her innocence drips with sin.

    She is the principle of perfection,
    Undisputed and without a question.




    Submitted on 2007-06-01 07:07:16     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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