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    dots Submission Name: perfection togtherdots
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    Author: sweetme16
    ASL Info:    18/f/who cares
    Elite Ratio:    2.21 - 108/251/162
    Words: 115
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 223
    Average Vote:    5.0000
    Bytes: 706



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    dotsperfection togtherdots
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    My hands on your hips

    your mouth on my lips

    My body pressed tight against yours

    Your hard muscle against my soft curves

    Hearts hammering a thousand times a minute

    Breath coming a million times faster

    Hands shaking and fumbling

    Trying to take it all off

    Each touch of your body

    Sending off sparks

    Finally ready to do what we both want

    You inside me

    Feels like heaven

    And when we’re done

    I’m left with a feeling of

    Total undisturbed

    Perfection




    Submitted on 2007-06-01 11:55:23     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Beautiful. What stands out the most to me is how you isolated the word "perfection" at the end, as if that word alone summarized the evend described in the poem.
    | Posted on 2007-12-17 00:00:00 | by Sparkster | [ Reply to This ]



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