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The Missing Shadow (grand finale)

Author: Themissingshado
ASL Info:    22/male/Seattle
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Words: 118
Class/Type: Poetry /Depressed
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The Missing Shadow (grand finale)

This is last thing i'll ever say,
my words don't much to you anyway.
I've verified my desend to darkness so long ago,
and forever i'll sleep on the ocean floor.
it's too late sweetheart...don't you cry,
even in suicide i'll live forever in your mind.

One more kiss goodnight will suffice as i plunge this knife into my chest.
I love you i'll say with my dying breath.

All this time we lived in a lie and we can't turn back it's too late sorries won't save us now.

Words don't mean anything...

This is the last thing that i'll ever say,
You didn't care about me anyway...

Submitted on 2007-06-01 20:35:38     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  My brother committed suicide and this piece was a flashback to what I first felt when I found out he died...

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