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    dots Submission Name: Lets Find Some Timedots
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    Author: theman
    ASL Info:    21/m/mn
    Elite Ratio:    3.52 - 496/478/149
    Words: 185
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Love
    Total Views: 1133
    Average Vote:    5.0000
    Bytes: 1197



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       Teenage hormones...LOL


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    dotsLets Find Some Timedots
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    You and I,
    Do what lovers
    Do under the covers

    Bite them lips
    Show me,
    how you work them hips
    slow down girl,
    Take your time
    And tease me

    Eyes full of lust,
    Your BODY is something I much touch and explore,
    Having your body screaming for more.

    You and I,
    Do what lover
    Do under the covers

    Say the name
    Say it loud and proud
    cause there is no other guy
    that can make both pair of lips,
    turn a frown upside down.

    Sweat, Pain, bodily fluid exchange
    itís all something
    That will make wanna you scream my name

    Hit the highway
    Donít worry about driving
    Iíll teach you how to drive a stick
    but there nothing you can do
    When it gets slippery and wet

    You and I,
    Do what lover
    Do under the covers

    So Baby Girl
    You mean everything in the world to me
    But the way you talk dirty
    Got me feeling so horny
    Wait in till morning
    You can be in control but,
    Right now Iím the king of that throne.




    Submitted on 2007-06-01 21:49:08     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      You need to read this and fix the grammar errors.
    | Posted on 2007-06-04 00:00:00 | by Ur.Poems.Suck | [ Reply to This ]
      Is this work supposed to be lyrics to a crappy pop song? If that's what you were going for, you really kicked ass dude!
    | Posted on 2007-06-02 00:00:00 | by eliwhitneyradio | [ Reply to This ]


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