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    dots Submission Name: Daddydots
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    Author: Cricket
    ASL Info:    19/F/Texas
    Elite Ratio:    2.48 - 81/51/27
    Words: 195
    Class/Type: Misc/
    Total Views: 756
    Average Vote:    4.5000
    Bytes: 1111



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       me and my alcholic father...


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    dotsDaddydots
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    You miss a lot of stuff when your passed out on the floor.
    Daddy is that all youíre here for?
    But itís okay now right thatís what you always say.
    Well its not weíll probably never be okay!
    I wasted so much time prayiní to no one for this shit to go away.
    Iím not gonna take it not one more fucking day.
    Tell me daddy where were you when I almost shot up the school?
    Naw Iím not blaming you because I was acting a fool.
    Could you even tell someone what happened to your precious little jewel?
    Oh yeah thatís right youíve never been the type that care.
    Kinda sad since you always said that youíd be there.
    ďIím just down the hall I swear.Ē
    Letís share broken memories and awkward stares.
    Be your self someone else just peel back the layers.
    You say that I make stupid choices ?
    When your oldest daughters a hooker and you married an old whore
    Yeah play it off now youíre the victim, how much more can you take?
    Daddy why are you getting pissed off when its you who taught me to be fake?




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      wow, i'm so sorry this happened to you. i truly wish there was something i could say or do to help. i hope and pray you've been able to recover from this. as a dad i can't imagine ever hurting one of my boys like this.

    peace, love and all that other junk,

    joe
    | Posted on 2007-06-06 00:00:00 | by joeyalphabet | [ Reply to This ]


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