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    dots Submission Name: the dumb truckdots
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    Author: LameMansTerms
    ASL Info:    36/M/Hermosa Beach, Ca
    Elite Ratio:    4.31 - 713/1012/165
    Words: 175
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Society
    Total Views: 1180
    Average Vote:    5.0000
    Bytes: 1192



    Description:
       this a song.....kinda--if it is even music ? Verdict is still out.....well in some countries-lol
    Lt


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    dotsthe dumb truckdots
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    The Dumb Truck
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    None of this is your fault
    you don't listen to anyone at all-
    it was a deliberate, inconsiderate
    only to get rid of it assault.
    None of this needs to be said
    I may be breathing but I'm already dead-

    ++Watch me bleed
    for our society
    only to be free
    I live for anarchy-
    watch me bleed
    for you and for me
    only to be free
    a hostage I never wanted to be++

    You navigate the dumb truck
    runnin into dumb luck again
    two by two you cruise into
    a world ....that's so corrupt-----

    -the radio is on-
    -but nothings in your head-
    -the wind is in your hair-
    -but you're never there-
    -you just stare straight ahead-
    -and say it's not my fault-
    -it's never my fault-
    -this is not my fault-

    ++watch me bleed
    for you and for me
    only to be me
    I love anarchy
    watch me bleed
    selfishly for me
    only to be free
    a victim I never wanted to be++

    lamemansterms




    Submitted on 2007-06-02 15:06:04     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      If its screamed real loud over terrible musicians, by some guy with an almost unrecognizable lyrical voice toward a mosh pit full of bloodied young people furious with their possibilities in this world,,,,,, cause most of them are just spoilt. Then yes It could pass as music/a song. Or if the artist sang it with their last dyeing pleading breaths of societal despair yeah it could pass like that as well I guess. The moral of the story? Iím not sure really, but perhaps donít watch the news or listen to commercial radio or fall in love or anything crazy like that, it just rots out brainsÖ. Yeah thatís about it I think.
    It was interesting, different.
    cheers
    | Posted on 2007-06-03 00:00:00 | by Andz | [ Reply to This ]


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