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    dots Submission Name: Waitingdots
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    Author: mysterious one
    ASL Info:    19/f/in my head
    Elite Ratio:    3.55 - 56/56/16
    Words: 100
    Class/Type: Poetry/Passion
    Total Views: 201
    Average Vote:    3.0000
    Bytes: 710



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    dotsWaitingdots
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    I feel your breath
    against my skin
    my heart it pounds
    with thoughts of sin

    My body quivers
    for just one touch
    but would that be
    yet too much

    I gently kiss
    your tender lips
    you place your hands
    upon my hips

    My passion burns
    a rising flame
    my head it bows
    out of shame

    I close my eyes
    this isn't right
    I want to wait
    the perfect night

    You understand
    and know it's true
    it's the right
    thing to do

    We say goodnight
    until that day
    confess our love
    the 12th of May




    Submitted on 2007-06-02 16:25:49     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I found it to be beautiful! throughout the poem i was reminded of my very first love.if it doesnt feel right it is best to wait. anyways the imagery was good the flow was nice. keep up the good work:)
    | Posted on 2007-06-29 00:00:00 | by EL | [ Reply to This ]
      i'm sorry. i just found it sappy...good rhyming 'till the last few lines though.
    | Posted on 2007-06-27 00:00:00 | by freddybuzzkill | [ Reply to This ]
      Beautiful. This was amazing to read. Its nice to know that their are others out there waiting too. I've been in a relationship for over a year and we're both waiting for the right moment. Good job. Just may be one of my favorites.
    | Posted on 2007-06-26 00:00:00 | by xSaraHx | [ Reply to This ]
      This was absolutely beautiful, and it tells a swell moral story as well! Well done, Princess!
    | Posted on 2007-06-02 00:00:00 | by Ron Cole | [ Reply to This ]



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