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    dots Submission Name: Deraileddots
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    Author: OrionsStorm
    ASL Info:    18/M/VA
    Elite Ratio:    2.74 - 180/247/76
    Words: 103
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Passion
    Total Views: 945
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 682



    Description:
       a short thrash song I just thought up


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    dotsDeraileddots
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    My train is coming off the tracks,
    I'll be sleepin with the fishes in a hour's time
    I've got a shotgun hidden under my coat,
    someone's getting blown away
    My heart is beatin a thousand miles an hour
    These drugs won't drown out this feeling
    Death is approaching, like a speeding bullet


    I've been derailed, it's a one way street
    I've hit a dead end, I'm dying slow
    What's worse is that I don't care
    Falling of a cliff, it's a forty story drop
    When I hit the bottom, at least I won't bleed
    And that will be a sweet relief




    Submitted on 2007-06-02 20:59:56     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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