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    dots Submission Name: Rambling Rhymedots
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    Author: Jessica Lynn
    ASL Info:    22/f/mn
    Elite Ratio:    2.86 - 121/119/57
    Words: 174
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 1031
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    Bytes: 996



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       lol. later that day i actually started dating this man. lol. but yeah. . .


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    dotsRambling Rhymedots
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    I close my eyes, there you are.
    You seem so close, and yet so far.
    All I want is to be by your side.
    To trust again, to keep my pride.
    I need to be your one and only.
    With the way it is now I feel so lonely.
    Dreaming at night, dreaming in the day.
    Yet when I speak to you I forget what to say.
    When I can't stop thinking its so frustrating.
    I can't help but wonder, can't stop contemplating.
    What will it be like when you are mine?
    What will happen and for how much time?
    These questions, they haunt me, and so I daydream.
    They make my eyes glitter and shine like sunbeams.
    See what you do to me when you walk back in?
    These thoughts make me giddy, it seems like a sin.
    They say obsessed, I think in love.
    I won't tell you that, till I know what you think of.
    So many thoughts, so little time.
    I can't carry on with this rambling rhyme!




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      I put the first eight lines in iambic tetrameter. Let me know if you like it.

    I close my eyes and there you are
    You seem so close and yet so far
    My place, my dear, is by your side:
    To trust again, to keep my pride
    I need to be your one and only.
    The way it's now I feel so lonely:
    Awake by night, asleep by day
    Yet when we speak there's naught to say.

    When I can't stop thinking its so frustrating
    I can't help but wonder, can't stop contemplating
    What will it be like when you are mine
    What will happen and for how much time
    These questions, they haunt me, and so I daydream
    They make my eyes glitter and shine like sunbeams
    See what you do to me when you walk back in
    These thoughts make me giddy, it seems like a sin
    They say obsessed, I think in love
    I won't tell you that, till I know what you think of

    So many thoughts, so little time;
    I need to stop this rambling rhyme!
    | Posted on 2009-02-01 00:00:00 | by isselman2001 | [ Reply to This ]
      Hey ...good to know u're dating the man behind this poem, seems u're in love , best of luck ! .
    And I like the poem revealing the first signs of love ... good job.
    * Drakoniss
    | Posted on 2007-06-17 00:00:00 | by drakoniss | [ Reply to This ]
      wow. i really like this one. it flows good. everything just seems in place. nice jod.
    | Posted on 2007-06-09 00:00:00 | by save me | [ Reply to This ]
      I love this Baby Girl...........and i don't what to sya its great and you forever and Always Mi amor!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
    | Posted on 2007-06-02 00:00:00 | by theman | [ Reply to This ]


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