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Author: secretsmiles
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because i tried to feel what others hate to feel, because i made myself prone to unfaithfulness, because i was too adventurous to hold you, because i went close to madness to pursue you, because i was having too much fun, because i was looking out too far and saw you, because i was overly convinced to manipulate you, because i yearned your touch, and because i believed you loved me too.

some reasons i was hiding in the shadows of deceit... and these reasons have gone extraneous for you to understand. i shall speak no words other than the BEST one i have to say... "GOODBYE, HAPPY".

because you felt what others love to feel, because you made yourself prone to my deceitfulness, because you were courageous to hold me, because you chose to go mad and pursue me, because you made it fun, because you looked at me, because you capitulated in my control, because you yearned my touch, and because you believed that you loved me.

some reasons you were not hiding from anything like the shadows... these reasons have become momentous for me to understand. you have spoken the BEST words you had to say to me... "IT's OVER. GOODBYE... WE'RE DONE".

Submitted on 2007-06-03 06:23:23     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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| Posted on 2007-06-20 00:00:00 | by secretsmiles | [ Reply to This ]

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