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I Quote Myself

Author: DrewDilla
ASL Info:    25/M/Chicago
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I try n ex plane cause no-one can understand----------------------------
hey sorry I said the wrong shit I been going thru some serious stuff----life changing----n personality changes--- look u can�t really understand it cause I don�t think your minds been damaged but remember mine has n it was no little broken arm it was the mind. So that makes it a lot worse. But u couldn�t understand that if u never went threw a TBI---Traumatic Brain Injury.----- There now y'all get a clue of me?

I Quote Myself

I quote my self. "You will understand life more once your minds been reformatted" I quote you "I will understand if I'm formatted? "No the stuff got to in my mind?" Nope now I'm a little blind, and can't see out the other. For some reason my eyes got wacked and my head took 8 cracks. I don't remember this moment in time. And I did commit a crime, or 2 or, 3, but to understand life as much as me. Do you understand what I mean? Or do things seem to obscene? Now I'll make things clean. I had to relearn how to walk and talk. Like I got reborn in a big body. I'm telling you I'm godly. I was in a coma for 2weeks. After doing a few different tweaks. P.T, O.T. and, speech. Leaving there was well within my reach. It only took 2 more months in rehab. So I was very glad to be on my way home, but I turned out all alone. Guess friends couldn't take the change. And no girl friend was in my rang. So I was stripped to basically nothing, but still had a little something. So just be, and that's full reality about me!!!

Submitted on 2007-06-03 12:24:07     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  i felt like i was back on vic. when i read this. i love it when works alter-state of minds. it's faultering rhythm seemed o mimick the way it happens.

| Posted on 2008-02-11 00:00:00 | by in shadow | [ Reply to This ]
  The rythm and style definitely has a sort of non-traditional freestyle hip-hop feel to me, and the overall effect of the strings of thoughts seem to pull in an inward spiral towards a sort of state of deeply penetrating yet detatched state of realization, sort of like a Zen koan that builds momentum every time I re-read it.

Very interesting.
| Posted on 2008-01-09 00:00:00 | by catechism42 | [ Reply to This ]
  This reads with a fast paced rhythm that keeps the reader focused throughout; it's got a pretty strong attitude that pushes the message into the reader's face, and kind of challenges them to understand.

I don't normally like rap, and I didn't get you at first when you were talking about this, but now that I read it more thoroughly and I have an idea of the story you're telling here, I think you did a really good job. Traumatic brain injury or not, you do have talent. Props, man.

| Posted on 2007-12-26 00:00:00 | by Jeniffer | [ Reply to This ]
  good. :]
| Posted on 2007-12-25 00:00:00 | by bogg | [ Reply to This ]
  wow.. i think this may be your best yet drew! so honest and in your face.. if i had to nit pick... there's a few misspelled words here and there. nothing big though. good work!

holy xx
| Posted on 2007-10-24 00:00:00 | by Holy Wood | [ Reply to This ]
  DUDE icy lyrics. I cant do any nit picking at ur lyrics. This is good.

The end is really swell cuz u said u still had a little something... so just be.

| Posted on 2007-09-20 00:00:00 | by DaGrimReaperess | [ Reply to This ]
A few years ago.. I fell ill with meningococle sceptecimia (sp?) and i was in a coma for 2 1/2 weeks... i lost the use of my body, spent 18 weeks in hospital, had to learn how to do everything all over again, was in a wheel chair for half a year, crutches for 8 months, 2-3 years on, im just out of pot, form an operation to fix a long term result of my illness, i almost died twice... and everyone rejected me..... this... it....words cant describe... how i feel
| Posted on 2007-06-23 00:00:00 | by ellesmera | [ Reply to This ]

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