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    dots Submission Name: daydreamdots

    Author: sbridges
    ASL Info:    33/F/Los Angeles
    Elite Ratio:    2.94 - 119/119/63
    Words: 71
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    mind's eye floating
    hidden ego gloating
    secret desires roaming
    tickling your dome and
    fantastic situations on loan
    surreal people moaning
    your attractions controlling
    'til you let it alone
    freely soloing and
    an adventure going
    with the flow of a God of your owning
    tho still within your means and growing
    for a story completely satisfying and glowing
    showing you what you want so
    and telling you what you want to know...

    Submitted on 2007-06-03 15:12:30     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      i can hear this being sung..
    quietly and slowly.
    just a thought.
    | Posted on 2007-06-04 00:00:00 | by BleedingTears | [ Reply to This ]
      hey that was pretty smooth flow. i didn't get much feeling out of it but it flows nice
    | Posted on 2007-06-03 00:00:00 | by kristian | [ Reply to This ]

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