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    Author: deepinthought
    ASL Info:    24, F, Shaw AFB, SC
    Elite Ratio:    3.25 - 72/96/19
    Words: 200
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
    Total Views: 100
    Average Vote:    4.0000
    Bytes: 1241



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    She walked into the bar trailing a perfume
    Of Obsession and desperation
    Looking for her fix, for her next big high
    She sat at the bar and looked around
    Eyes blurred, desperately searching
    Wanting it with every part of her body
    He approached her, knowing what she needed
    Offered cash up front just to have a good time
    Hating herself and what she did
    But with no thought of declining the offer
    She left with him.
    Outside against a wall she earned her money
    And earned the hate inside herself
    She left him with a silent “I hate you”
    That came out as a “thanks”.
    She walked slowly, a fragment of what she should be
    Because some man had pushed her around
    She forgot who she was and what she could be
    She forgot that she was a woman
    She had a woman’s strength somewhere
    Deep down, hidden, but there nonetheless
    And some day she knew she would find it
    Find the strength that every woman was born with
    And she would rise and become more
    Than she ever dreamed she could be
    Once she discovered the invisible steel inside herself
    That comes with being a woman.




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      Oh my gosh. When I read this poem, it gave me goosebumps, and not every poem does that. I could picture every little detail of the poem.

    "She forgot who she was and what she could be, she forgot that she was a woman..."
    This part moved me. Those two lines made me remember that everytime I'm down, I need to look inside of myself and remember that I'm a woman. Cheezy, but that's what it told me. I'm definately adding this one. Good Job!!!
    -AnGeL
    | Posted on 2007-06-03 00:00:00 | by bubble_popper15 | [ Reply to This ]



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