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    dots Submission Name: anywhere but heredots
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    Author: blackbird
    ASL Info:    31/male/reykjavik iceland
    Elite Ratio:    2.35 - 194/328/300
    Words: 154
    Class/Type: Prose/Misc
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    dotsanywhere but heredots
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    in some sort of velvet apocalypse
    i could imagine you and i
    tied to some broken tracks
    somewhere in the northern regions,
    the sick of sleep
    around our unbrushable eyes,
    waiting for the train
    that will never come
    to split us into
    spring, summer, fall & winter

    and we only ever seem
    to catch a glint
    or a hint or two of the fact
    that perfection can best be described
    as the moment
    when two eccentrically charged bodies
    collide in passion
    and still make it through the day
    without dying

    yet there are still those amongst us
    that would trail away the dead
    in useless husks of self defeat
    waiting for the time
    when nothing in paticular is going to happen
    and blindly faithful
    that life is bound to go somewhere
    or at least anywhere but here
    never gripping the present
    as if it were the only now to enjoy




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      reflecting gods so tragic their flaw. as poetry speaks it is not for all years and like all actors we give birth to cruel injustices. bring to light the foibles of our fellows. it is not always our face we see in the mirror each day.


    never change on petty words. evolve. abstract is easy. but you are an impressionist.
    | Posted on 2007-06-18 00:00:00 | by in shadow | [ Reply to This ]
      This is too sad and boring. I'd suggest you try and use your life. Living is so much better than thinking about stuff like this.

    Velvet apocalypse???

    Whatever you think might sound "cool" I guess.
    | Posted on 2007-06-04 00:00:00 | by Ur.Poems.Suck | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow, I love this. I think I understand what you mean at the end and I wish people would embrace life too. This would probably benefit from a little revising but other than that this is a beautiful write.
    Keep on writing!
    ~chelle
    | Posted on 2007-06-04 00:00:00 | by Priestess | [ Reply to This ]


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