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    dots Submission Name: Alwaysdots
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    Author: StylerDen
    ASL Info:    29/Male/Malaysia
    Elite Ratio:    2.98 - 38/59/51
    Words: 100
    Class/Type: Random Thoughts/Love
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    dotsAlwaysdots
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    Always remember,
    I will listen when you talk
    Always remember,
    I will comfort you when you are hurt
    Always remember,
    I will walk beside you when you feel alone
    Always remember,
    I will guide you when you lose your way
    Always remember,
    I will hold your hand when you need comfort
    Always remember,
    I will stand by you when you need support

    Always know,
    You are a blessing to me
    Always know,
    You make me feel safe, secure and loved
    Always know,
    I treasure each moment i spent with you
    Always know,
    I will forever be here for you




    Submitted on 2007-06-04 07:27:30     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      agreed. hallmark material. but fck hallmark i rather like yours better. a great way to show someone you love them no matter who it may be. wooo!
    | Posted on 2007-06-04 00:00:00 | by lark | [ Reply to This ]
      Sweet, Hallmark-card words.

    But perhaps "Always remember/I will hold your hand when you need comfort" can be deleted because you've already mentioned "I will comfort you when you are hurt". It's a needless repetition.

    Just my opinion.

    | Posted on 2007-06-04 00:00:00 | by Maverique | [ Reply to This ]


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