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    dots Submission Name: She Falls Asleep by Tom Fletcher (McFly writer)dots
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    Author: Lord Bane
    ASL Info:    24/M/Isle of Wight, UK
    Elite Ratio:    2.26 - 40/81/50
    Words: 142
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Depressed
    Total Views: 975
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 911



    Description:
       These are the lyrics to a Mcfly song (from about 2005) called She Falls Asleep. Its about a girl commiting suicide (from her perspective too). If you want to hear the song version, look on Youtube: .
    Included all the words cos it makes more sense that way. Plus most non-McFly fans won't have heard of it. One Request: Please do not ignore the song cos of the band its by, I want your opinion of the lyrics, NOT the band


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    dotsShe Falls Asleep by Tom Fletcher (McFly writer)dots
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    Chorus
    She falls asleep and all she thinks about is you,
    She falls asleep and all she dreams about is you,
    When she's asleep the air she's breathing is for you
    Are why she wants to live
    She's not got that much more to give

    She sits alone on her phone and she's calling about her broken home
    And I don't know what I should say cos she's crying and
    Feels as though she's thrown it all away, and she won't last another day

    You're climbing the stairs unaware that she's hurting, bad
    And lying very still on the floor by the door but it's locked
    Cos she was hoping that you would come back for more
    But it's too late to realize you've made mistakes

    Chorus

    Please save me I've been waiting, been waiting far too long.




    Submitted on 2007-06-04 07:37:26     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      That's so sad- it's beautiful in a dark way that someone can feel so strongly for someone else to do that- it is put across in a dignified way and the way it is put across from her point of view but not through her voice is very effective
    | Posted on 2007-06-14 00:00:00 | by Mina Liston | [ Reply to This ]
      I liked this
    it made me feel like was in a lost soul
    but it also brought back alot bad memories for me
    | Posted on 2007-06-09 00:00:00 | by littlepoet | [ Reply to This ]


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