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    dots Submission Name: An Animaldots
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    Author: UnderlinedInRed
    ASL Info:    16/f/Beijing
    Elite Ratio:    4.16 - 177/240/109
    Words: 161
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
    Total Views: 130
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 922



    Description:
       Yea ok there are some cliché parts...but I was trying to write something deep..and its hard to write something deep when I have lost all emotion....I'm not even sure who I am anymore...


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    dotsAn Animaldots
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    I want to be more than this.
    The girl everyone sees.
    The slut behind closed doors.
    Caged in, like an animal,
    Yet they watch me, meticulously,
    When I no longer wish to be watched.
    They turn away when I want to be seen.
    See me now, for I am more than that girl behind these bars.
    See me now for deep within,
    I am someone,
    About to begin,
    The long journey to find a home,
    And to find my soul lost in this abyss.
    Memories, I will not miss.
    Friends which I could do without,
    If only I could stop long enough
    To not doubt,
    That I have people somewhere, who care for me,
    As much as I care to survive.

    When I am finally let free, I know I will just fall into another trap, caught in the hook of a fishing line, reeling me into destiny. Unhook me, throw me in, before I forget how to swim.




    Submitted on 2007-06-04 08:56:40     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      *sorry, meant to say wasn't (I'm a little tired and finding it hard to type so well)
    | Posted on 2007-06-04 00:00:00 | by Predator | [ Reply to This ]
      I think you undersell this as it really was that bad. However if you are finding it hard then I'd advise (from experience) that you write things down, ideas or even just snippets of ideas, and give them form later. It's hardest to write when you aren't really into it.

    Like you say, there are clichés. It isn't really unchartered water but there is potential for something good here. Keep going.

    Thanks for the read
    | Posted on 2007-06-04 00:00:00 | by Predator | [ Reply to This ]



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