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    dots Submission Name: Reveriedots

    Author: AeThe Lost Poet
    ASL Info:    19/M/DE
    Elite Ratio:    3.6 - 147/184/122
    Words: 117
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    We (humans) are controversial.
    Elusive, hurt,
    Obsessed reluctant,
    Slaves of habit,
    Brave hearts we bear,
    But we save our true colors,
    When we are scared,
    Of ourselves, our fears,
    Even our own thoughts,
    That bring paranoia,
    We know it shouldn’t ought,
    So nights we sleep,
    We want to live in a reverie,
    A reference to us, and
    What will is to never be,
    But our dreams, our hopes,
    Our ways of life,
    Are hanging on,
    Not days, but nights,
    So we sleep, we dream,
    We reference the reverie,
    We cause to come,
    What is to ever be,
    We dream, we cause,
    Yes, we are controversial,
    We prove hope prevails,
    A rule universal…

    Submitted on 2007-06-04 09:08:42     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      don't listen to lildudespider i think that your poem is amazing it brings up questions about humans and if we were ment to be this smart or if we were only ment to be well somewhat diffrent than the great apes.

    I did find one thing that my grammar teacher would have hounded me on
    in line eleven was it suposed to be they bring paranoia. or that bring paranoia ?
    | Posted on 2007-06-04 00:00:00 | by stormkrow | [ Reply to This ]

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