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    dots Submission Name: When fear finds you...dots
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    Author: pixie_007
    Elite Ratio:    3.36 - 45/77/63
    Words: 143
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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       I had the time,so I poured my thought onto the paper. Forgive me if its too raw,but there are those few who will understand it.


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    dotsWhen fear finds you...dots
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    I crawled under my bed and hid there for years,then the space became too small.
    So I went and hid inside my closet and hoped Fear won't find me. then It caught up to me...

    I managed to get away and flee to somewhere far away,I crossed oceans to find this hiding place,but I found it.
    I thought I finally found that one place where Fear couldn't touch me.

    But Fear found me... And when Fear finds you, there's nothing left for you to do except fight or give in. I couldn't fight so I gave in.
    My surrender was an embarrasment and the humiliation still clings to my skin. But that day will soon be history when I come back and fight Fear,mark my words,I will come back.

    When Fear finds me,I will be ready.




    Submitted on 2007-06-04 09:57:45     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I'd really like to see you shape this into something less raw and basic. As it is the reader just reads it and thinks 'fair enough' (well I did, personally). If you sculpted it, made those lines memorable, made it shift and turn like a poem I really feel the message would be more powerful.

    If you do rewrite it then let me know.

    Thanks for the read
    | Posted on 2007-06-04 00:00:00 | by Predator | [ Reply to This ]


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